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RE: Finish the Fiction Story Contest - WEEK #10

in #contest7 years ago

She blinked awake and she was a girl again. Her father stared down with concern. “Penelope”, he whispered, “Where did you go?” In a moment it all flooded back. She had grown up, she had finished school and university, and had married and started a family of her own. But in the waking world her mind lost grip on those memories like escaping balloons until all that remained was a faint, fuzzy premonition of warmth overshadowed by unspeakable darkness.

It was with this same dizzy, disturbed look that she was found by the firemen hours later, in the bushes across the street, Cupcake shivering at her side as the flames collapsed her house.

No one ever understood why.

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Welcome to the contest Rich! I loved this, in particular:

like escaping balloons until all that remained was a faint, fuzzy premonition of warmth overshadowed by unspeakable darkness.

Such a vivid image. I think that in few words you were able to open a unique window on Penelope's tormented inner world and ghosts. Bravo!

Spooky and dreamlike!

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I'm pleased as punch that you participated! We're practically neighbors! I'm in L.A.!

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