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RE: Hellbent - Part 1 (My Original Short Story)
Woah! From sci-fi to supernatural, you truly are a master of the quill, brother! This has got to be one of your most action-packed openers, and you know how big of a fan I am of your openers. So descriptive! You really painted a gory scene there, I needed to do a double-take to make sure. This was something I shouldn't have read before I ate haha!
I like how you named the protagonist for this one--Joe. Very nondescript. It forces the reader to focus on his actions. The way you characterized him was so vivid, I felt like I have known him for a long time. Nice to get an anti-hero for a change! You had me at the edge of my seat, my bro! I can't wait for Chapter 2!
I have to ask, what about The Setup though?
Hey there, @jedau! Sorry for pushing the boundaries out on the old "crimson vino" descriptions but it goes in accordance to the world I'm portraying, lol. And man, thanks so very much for your invaluable feedback. Should have a little story here that may turn into something a little bigger down the road.
Joe is a hardened individual who kinda likes to do things his way. So yeah, a little bit more about him coming up soon, lol. Getting the next part ready, many thanks for dropping by! I needed to hear what my "brother from another mother" thinks! Awesome, my bro! :)
(p.s. Sorry, my mistake, I wasn't clear about it at all. The Setup was a short piece of elongated flash fiction supposed to be a complete work. The spin-offs after that were just adding to the original. So I think I'm done with that story for now, man. But I got in some good practice writing from differing perspectives though).