PoetryDice #31 entry - Poem 'Breathe'

in #poetrydice6 years ago (edited)

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Breathe,
Just like the trees that blossom in the spring,
Breathe,
Deep within, the pure flower of the air,
Breathe,
Feel it flow, not frightening, a sharp tingle, like lightning,
That crosses our souls like a firm bridge over water,
Just Breathe!
Breathe in deep, breath and relax, breathe,
So the question hanging over our day,
Is no longer a fire, a clock that ticks away,
But a tree of our spiritual desires,
Blossoming, flourishing, the apple regained,
So that when we breathe our last,
Our life can be placed under a magnifying glass,
And it can be clearly seen, that our life gained,
From pausing to relax and just breathe.

This is this weeks entry into the competition run by @rensoul17

It required the use of the following words from the picture above:

Row 1
Lightning... Bridge over water... Magnifying glass

Row 2
Tree... Fire... Clock

Row 3
Flower... Apple... Question Mark

I have used the sentence
'Just like the trees that blossom in the spring,' as my opening line

and then selected the theme 'Breathe'

All power to @rensou17 - this week I wold have struggled to use all the given possible lines or themes which means this weeks competition has great breadth and depth.

Good luck to everyone taking part

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So beautiful. It sweeps across my spirit and mind like a lovely breeze on a warm summer's day. You did an excellent job @andrewcarnegie. I am re-steeming this one.

Thank you / duly honoured :-)

Wow... You've written an awesome piece.. For some reason, I feel relaxed after reading it. :)

Thanks, I always think with poetry, as with most things in life, if one other person feels good due to the poem or action, then everything is worthwhile ;-)

Super true! ^^ It would even inspire you to write more and touch more people... ^^

Fujoshi

The twilight of the rotten apple,
Self mocking,
Inwardly shocking,
In a dominated patriarchacy,
What thoughts set you free,
When you search for intimacy,
Woman in the man,
Can you see it,
Can you find it,
Do women grasp its hidden hand,
Or is this cultural spirituality,
Hide, see me if you can?

#poetry

Fugoshi??? It should have been Fujoshi.. hihihi~
but WOW... I'm loving this piece... ^^

Sorry, there must be two spellings online, I had to look it up to understand what it meant - corrected - glad you liked it :-)

No worries.. but yeah.. I really like the poem you made.. <3

Thank you ;o) But that sort of completes the reason it was written - as a response to you saying if one person feels enhanced, write another one ;o)

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