Terry's Poetry Tryings. Is The Game Worth The Candle?

in #poetry7 years ago





Through darkness and gloom - colored soap bubbles...

Beware of sudden "boom", there are so many troubles!

But anyway... some will burst and disappear,

Leaving only rainbow spray and someone's tear.



So push on the accelerator!

Get another oxygen tank!

Not yet time for evacuator!

Still your look is not blank!



Many left the track and became like everyone else,

Don't look back and don't let your plans melts.

Yeah, these bubbles too fragile - hard to save...

But the loss is too tragic - you become its slave!



So please check the gasoline!

Find the last oxygen tank!

No more time to wait for the green!

Are you sure that it's not a prank?



The river flows faster and faster every day,

What after... maybe you are just going astray?

All the goddamn bubbles are still far away!

Are you tired... ready to live in the gray?



No oxygen - just hold your breath!

Pull out your both hands and grasp!

The only reason to retreat - death?

Chasing dreams till the last gasp...



Sincerely, Terry Craft.


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This is an amazing quatrain, the rhyme scheme comes in ABAB there is also a rhythmic scheme in the poem that makes it music like and lovely

Amazing sir, this is beautiful

Hi.

I hope so!

just amazing.....
thanks for sharing

Lovely verses. Great end rhymes too. What inspires you to write?

Hello, sir.

Life...

Life indeed teach us much. There's energy in your poem that only a zest for life can give.

the only reason to retreat-death?

The question mark at the end says you are daring the threat of death to make you stop living. That's a great thing. Too many times, we let living take its toll and we start to fade away. Nice piece of poetry sir

Thank you for such an encouraging feedback!

The questioning at the end of this line also says that I'm not sure that death is the end of our path. I am not a believer, but everything can be. The soul, the energy... so much still unknown to mankind!

It is true. We are still trying to understand what life is.

Hehe..I enjoyed it a lot.You organized the words amazingly! You are igniting a spark on me to try myself in the endeavour of poem-writing!

All the best..Keep moving!

Thank! Good luck to you in writing

Another seminal post by the maestro.

I don't think so ) I'm too critical of my... ramblings

Press through man. You will be fine.

Very nice poem ♥

it reflects an emotional state. Thank you for writing it

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