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RE: Humility's Victory - An Alliterative Poem
This is such a great tribute and narrative, and rings so well in the active, @whoshim!
Even a story I've heard so many times before, it reads so fresh here and gives new life to a classic.
I'm a big fan of the ending, it feels so climactic and perfectly framed. Everything builds the platform for the moment of truth and then !!
thank you so much for the share, happy to have been even a little bit of help to this cool piece.
Thanks so much for your kind words! I really like how it reads now in the present active also. Your suggestions really helped smooth out some of the clunky bits. I had tried so hard to make this good before submitting it to the Isle of Write, but there were still a lot of problems. :)
minor problems that were quick fixes; you crushed it, mate!