That Same Stare
There she was, looking at him with so much feelings suppressed within. She kept her eyes sharp and that look seems like it just happened yesterday.
But, it didn't. This is a 10 year old story of a young lady who has been promised to be taken on the rangers trip.
What rangers trip you might ask?
Well, it is the most adventurous expedition that to the forest. Those participants get to experience the wildlife. Away from their hometown. Away from their loved ones. It teaches them survival skills. But that is not all, they go out as ordinary people and come back as the most famous ones. They get to ask the king for one favor and their wish gets granted.
There he was the coordinator, the most famous person in town. Passing by, knowing that she is looking right at him. But, never making an eye contact back. Because, he knows that it has been years of broken promises between them. He knows that her eyes is telling what sort of let down she is feeling from within. But, he acts like it never happened.
There she was, keeping her feelings to herself. That story that has never been told. Her wishes are still within. There she was standing over the other side, making that look for another year.
Surely the one who is close to the heart can understand the unspoken things of the eyes.
I like your story very much. Good start of your story writing, good luck for writing more new stories.
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I don't know if I will be writing anymore stories. Because, I am not the type that is drawn to novels /stories. I am more into non-fiction (in both writing & reading).
Thanks for passing by & the compliment.
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you know that Lesson 2 started?
Don't forget to add the hashtags if you comment!
I am so sorry, i don't know how I missed this point.
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There should always be someone be the first.
I would not call every part of what you wrote a story, for example but I agree with @naina9 that this is a great start and I hope to read more.
Of course. LOL
I don't know what parts of the story, would not be called a story. Just to explain how the story goes, it is not about going out and doing some activities. It is more about what is going on in the character's own mind. Basically, it is influenced by my reading.
I hope I write more. LOL
Because, I have less ideas when it comes to stories.
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It really deserved a little more time put into it and further expanding of the inner life of the characters by showing it in a little action. I liked the concept and it's a great start. You should expect to improve as you practice. Don't be afraid to express deeper emotions, because: they are not yours, they're the character's.
Kudos on the change of style.
Just to start with, I want to say that you know how to drop a good comment.
I'm not sure about improvement, as I need more practice in story writing. But, I am more interested in writing non-fiction text. So, even the story was only about diving into what the character is experienced inside. Of course it could be improved.
Thanks =D
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I just comment what I think. I am also brutally honest. If I have nothing helpful to say, I usually avoid commenting, so no one gets offended.
Thanks for you time answering my comment.
Cheers.
You started with saying "I'm brutally honest" and ended with "so no one gets offended". Well, this is the first time that I see this. LOL
Anyway, I get your point. I always like to keep a conversation when it is meaningful.
Cheers!
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I just meant I avoid commenting when I feel too strongly about it and know I'm about to do more damage than good. You do good writing. Just keep practicing. You can write anything.