Write in Micro size: (The Clever Stock Agent)
Hello all my steemian friends,
today I am participating in this challenge: Write in micro size -- (competition) which is organized by @joslud of Colombia-original
I also want to invite here
@josepha
@naka05
@haidee
My Story Total 96 words “The Clever Stock Agent”
In the afternoon, as soon as Anjali read the statement of the Defence Secretary on the news bulletin that "For better protection of soldiers deployed on the border, the government has decided to buy "special bulletproof suits", her mind lit up.
Anjali came to know from sources that the government has issued an order of 5 million dollars to "Kings and Shots".
Anjali is a sharp stock agent, she advised all her clients to immediately buy lots of shares of this company.
Out of this profit of the clients, Anjali also has to get 6% profit.
My self analysis on my story:-
This is my first experience of writing such a micro story, but to be honest, I enjoy facing such challenges. My story may be short but I have tried my best to give my full message in it.
And I have full hope from my readers that they will not be dissatisfied after reading my story. I had carefully understood the tips and methods of writing short stories. And I think I have made my attempt worthwhile.
I have given complete clue and message to the readers in it. I also feel that my story is an explosive story, I was able to convey my message to my readers with my limited words. My language was precise and thought-provoking.
And finally I do not want to praise myself too much, only my readers will be able to tell whether my story, despite being concise, was able to please their minds or not.
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Writers always want to present their stories in great detail so that they can present all the facts, but this was not the case here. We had to convey our story to the readers in a concise manner, that is, in just 100 words.
When I created my story, it had more than 250 words, then while working on it, I brought it down to 115 and I thought that I will not be able to reduce it further, but then I reduced it further to 96 words and read my story again and I was satisfied that my story is still conveying the message.
I have also read the subtle stories of 2 other participants in this contest @soyronald and @hljott and given my comments on them.
Thanks for reading my post, I pray to God for the progress and happy future of all Steemians.
Sur-riti❤️
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A story that says a lot despite having 96 words, I congratulate you for encouraging yourself to participate in this challenge, I wish you much success and I hope to continue reading posts like this.
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Hi @sur-riti
I'm glad you took on this challenge of writing micro stories and that you enjoyed it. I also read that you learned in the process of reducing your 250 original words to less than 100.
Your story, well done with its beginning, its development and an ending. When I read it translated into Spanish, I thought that I would like to have a stockbroker, like the protagonist, attentive to detecting opportunities, very good control of his emotions and who seeks for his clients to obtain profits.
The first three paragraphs generated a lot of expectation of adventure in me, also curiosity, what would he do with that valuable information?
The end, lowered those expectations, because the stockbroker continues to be a very good professional.
Tomorrow I will send you the feedback according to the parameters of the contest.
Again, good work and thank you very much for participating.
Hello friend,
I am very happy that I lived up to your expectations and that you enjoyed my micro story, but in the end you wrote that the last paragraph has diminished your hopes, I did not understand what this means. Anyway, it does not matter, today I will wait for feedback according to your parameters.
With thanks.