Now I wish I had given "harmony" three syllables that mean the same but are not so obvious. If a feeling of harmony is the object, it would be better not to use the actual word.
So perhaps one should think more about what is not palpable at the first impression and as you say the person who reads poetry stops and reads it two or three more times, then finding the deep meaning it has.
yes! One has to find ones way through a haiku, slowly, let it sink in. the word harmony is too obvious. However, I can't think of a thing! here are some words I like: mutual, tranquil, absolute, unbounded, open pure, full, free spirit, untethered, innocent
at the cusp
of the turning tides
innocence
That's better, less obvious. I'll keep trying. Thanks for your input! I love working on stuff together. Wewrite haiku!
It's not easy to find a way to express harmony without name it, in three syllables.
Generally, I tend to avoid to name abstract concepts, but there is a drawback: the feeling evoked in the reader is almost certainly different from mine.
This is fine for me, but maybe another haiku author wants more precision.
My take on this one could have been something like that:
at the cusp
of the turning tides -
tranquil breath
aw. thanks for reading and for your sweet sweet comment. I could have just used those three words instead of harmony.
I certainly had not thought that this could form part of your Haiku itself, besides Harmony encompasses many ideas, LOL
Now I wish I had given "harmony" three syllables that mean the same but are not so obvious. If a feeling of harmony is the object, it would be better not to use the actual word.
So perhaps one should think more about what is not palpable at the first impression and as you say the person who reads poetry stops and reads it two or three more times, then finding the deep meaning it has.
yes! One has to find ones way through a haiku, slowly, let it sink in. the word harmony is too obvious. However, I can't think of a thing! here are some words I like: mutual, tranquil, absolute, unbounded, open pure, full, free spirit, untethered, innocent
at the cusp
of the turning tides
innocence
That's better, less obvious. I'll keep trying. Thanks for your input! I love working on stuff together. Wewrite haiku!
It's not easy to find a way to express harmony without name it, in three syllables.
Generally, I tend to avoid to name abstract concepts, but there is a drawback: the feeling evoked in the reader is almost certainly different from mine.
This is fine for me, but maybe another haiku author wants more precision.
My take on this one could have been something like that:
at the cusp
of the turning tides -
tranquil breath
oh yes! That is lovely! thank you!