Mizu no Oto contest # 10 - Haiku, Image [ENG/ITA]
once leaf, once tree,
sudden late meeting
fra foglia e legno s'apre un
tardivo incontro
once leaf, once tree,
sudden late meeting
fra foglia e legno s'apre un
tardivo incontro
once leaf, once tree,
sudden late meeting
fra foglia e legno s'apre un
tardivo incontro
Once leaf, once tree - I love how pondering someone else's writing brings up new thoughts. I never thought before of the aspect that the boards were also once tree! Nice.
Yes! I was all focused on the leaf but then I realised the connection.
I will leave this small note here, as in my idea a haiku has to be left free to float and resound in the reader's mind without any indication or conditioning. This notwithstanding, since this is a contest, here's a technical point.
Like others - and I found it interesting! - I could have drafted an original version, plus a literal translation, plus a free version in the second language. Unavoidably, when it's about languages, the container modifies the content.
I skipped the literal translation because, again, I don't want to create a "busy" feeling in the reader. My choice is due to the research of a sense of inner peace, which I want to share. That's also the reason of master Kobayashi Issa's verses, which you can find at the bottom of all my poems. So we have two slightly different haiku here, with the same spirit.
With my most sincere heart and purest intent, I hope you will enjoy this small poem.
It's almost inevitable, and even I prefer when I can, do two different haiku when using two different languages. I'm happy to be able to appreciate them both, even if I am amazed at the fact that often I prefer yours in English rather than in Italian. Perhaps because the simpler vocabulary is closer to my idea of haiku
Yes, that's why here the English one comes first.. When I start writing, I can't tell which language will prevail. When I write I draw a vertical line and develop the two together. Thanks for your opinion.. It means a lot in my little inner debates.
Oh, I love this line! <3
Both the elements in the shot are the simulacra of a tree.. everything flows. Thanks for commenting Val ☺️
Oh, you meant the wooden path... Yeah, this is very very beautiful.
I was thinking about the leaf having the cells of the tree. Something like: Everything consists of everything. The leaf having the tree inside and the tree having the leaf inside :)
Gosh, @f3nix, every time a learn a new word with you! This is the first time a hear of "simulacra". How do you know these words? Is it close to Latin or Italian? :D
二天一
Niten Ichi, Two heavens as one.
(That was latin 😉)
That’s really pretty. Your haiku, I mean :)
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Thank you :-))
Kigo, and Mono No Aware. The meeting of two natural objects that have been transformed. Wish I could appreciate the Italian. All good.
I'm impressed by how you captured my intention in few words. Thanks for your cool comment bud!
"Autumn's gold" is an extremely beautiful image.
Thank you! Like a Klimt painting 🙂
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