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RE: Untilted Series: Bloodsport 1.0 [An Intro. ~600 words]

in #fiction8 years ago

Good work. Keep it up. I'd like to see where the story goes.

Is there a reason you don't put paragraph breaks when different characters speak? It can be a bit confusing without them.

For Example:
“Let’s spill some blood” she says.

“Alright, doll-face. Go for the throats first? Let's enjoy the new luxury together."

“You know me; novelty before Art.”

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Wasn't sure if it's always best to do, thanks for the suggestion and encouragement