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RE: Untilted Series: Bloodsport 1.0 [An Intro. ~600 words]
Good work. Keep it up. I'd like to see where the story goes.
Is there a reason you don't put paragraph breaks when different characters speak? It can be a bit confusing without them.
For Example:
“Let’s spill some blood” she says.
“Alright, doll-face. Go for the throats first? Let's enjoy the new luxury together."
“You know me; novelty before Art.”
Wasn't sure if it's always best to do, thanks for the suggestion and encouragement