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RE: ColorChallenge: ThursdayGreen - "Kicking a Hornet's Nest" [11MinuteFreeWrite]
Dialogue done right can be great. Move the story along, fill in details, show personality, etc. When not done right, well, it can bog a story down. Keeping the dialogue real is the challenge, I find. Like getting into the head of different people, and then conveying that through written word. It helps when you have multiple people already in your head! Mine keep me company at least. That's a plus.
So yes, I liked this one, it felt right. The husband's response was believable, given some people I have known, but extreme. Which emphasised the back and forth between them in a way that upped the dynamics of the story. It worked.
Awesome! This is so great to hear. I can't emphasize how much this sort of feedback means to me. Given this story was sort of done as a reflex, it's great that everything still worked. I really wanted this to shine a light to the dynamics and I'm glad it did. Thanks for the ups, mate!
Yeah, thank you for the kind compliments!
Wait, what? Who told you that you could come out during daylight?
It's evening somewhere else in the world. Plus, who are you to keep me at bay, you're not the boss of me!
Ugh, I can't even. Don't start with me, I'm warning. Sorry for this, mate. Carry on.
Ha, you're opening a can of worms there. Let the internal dialogue flow free, my friend.
Having discussed this with my own voices they tell me they have no idea what I am talking about.
Anyway, like you say, carry on.
Haha! That's why I put a lid on it before our internal voices have a conversation of their own. Once that happens, who knows what shenanigans they might get in to.