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RE: Amazon overreaction and Adult Dungeon realization

in #writing6 years ago

thank you! Yes, amazon is a curse and a blessing. Butts are perfectly natural!

"skin for worry I'd hurt" is an example of poor writing. It should be "worrying" as that word conveys more action and sense of movement.

My writing has a lot of "for," "in," and prepositional phrases because I think while writing and don't always craft the words to produce the best effect all the time. I'm working on it, so pointing that out is a worthy notice.

It should be "I pushed myself off her without pushing against her fine young skin worrying that I’d crush or hurt her more.

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