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RE: Creepy-crawlies (Weekend freewrite)
You write so well, with great command of Deep POV, a strong narrative voice, and a seamless sneaking in of backstory--you pack in so much --e.g.
...a very restless boy, as his mother used to say, carefully avoiding to use harsher words. But Richie knew what she meant, and naughty was actually the mildest term. He was an ungrateful boy, that’s what he was. Selfish and insensitive, too. And they both knew where he got that, although nobody ever mentioned Harold, his father.
And now to finish reading...!
Ooh, here's another fantastic "reveal" with well-chosen words:
He had no real memory of his father, the image in his head being largely built upon hearsay and the few pictures his mother kept in the bottom drawer of her dresser, under the silk lingerie she had no use for these days, but she did not have the heart to throw away. In those old photos, Harold was always smiling or goofing around in a silly party hat. Richie had trouble imagining his mother laughing, but the photos were proof that she used to. Before he was born.
I love this!! They both used those infrequent phone calls to spy on each other, trying to guess how things are at the other end from the tone of the first hello.
Thanks for being such a wonderful and supportive reader!