Would this work as an opening for a book?

in #storyline8 years ago (edited)

I have been working on my first novel for a while (if over 6 months is worth calling 'a while') however, the opening 'introduction' few paragraphs have got me thinking. Do I need to start over? Or do I just need a little something to draw the readers in?
Then I thought about getting feedback from potential readers, again questions run through my mind. So, I am just going to follow my gut instincts and put it out there and wait. Just wait, to see what comments and suggestions come back before making a final decision on how I am going to change it, if at all.

So here is the opening few paragraphs as follows, please feel free to comment your opinions and suggestions. If you would also like to read any more of the storyline, please feel free to say so and I will do my best to include more in the future.
Thank you in advance for any form of feedback, I am looking forward to seeing what you all think...

The opening paragraphs:

She was sitting at the front by the stage, but more so in the corner quietly, hoping to go unnoticed, everyone else on the other hand were rather excited, cheering, chanting, stomping their feet and clapping their hands. She too was rather excited, but refrained from showing it, not wanting to embarrass herself in front of an entire auditorium of strangers, especially being on her own. It wouldn’t really matter if she did make a complete fool of herself as no one was really paying any attention to those around them, they were there with the same objectives.

Emily wasn’t used to being part of such a large crowd in such a small enclosed environment, spending most of her time in large open spaces with mostly animals. That had become her sanctuary, her safe haven where most of the people were family and friends. Almost everyone knew everyone else and their business, they loved to gossip on those pesky little details that did not really matter at all. The only strangers she would encounter were the customers who frequently visited for business purposes, which she found satisfactory for what was required on a daily basis.

She didn’t feel overly comfortable being the centre of attention when it wasn’t necessary, especially if it wasn’t for her job requirements or for the talents she so often buried deep inside. Whenever people came over to the paddock Emily was working on, she would take the animals or contraptions in the area and use them to draw the attention directly away from herself.

Although this cunning little plan worked out well, some people still showed interest in how well she worked, paying complements and asking questions when necessary. She often gave a limited but very informative answer. In doing so, bringing in more one-time customers and more importantly long term regulars who would return multiple times a week or even daily to find something new.

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