You have minor typos, I suggest using Grammarly to locate them, it is easier visually to find all of it.
The change that will definitely help your case is splitting big texts into smaller paragraphs so that the audience can follow up the story better, and it will be easier on eyes.
Sourcing an image is better with the full link of the page where it is originally downloaded from.
Otherwise, great job. Keep it up.
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