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RE: Neurology #1 : World Parkinson's Day

in #steemstem7 years ago

Greetings from the steemSTEM Community!

I am Jonathan Pederson, a mentor from the community and I just finished reading your article and I can truly tell that you are a brilliant student that pours knowledge learned from your studies into these articles. I think Parkinson's disease is widely known but hardly acknowledged and this article offers a great presence in the space to shed some light on the disease.

I think your formatting is phenomenal and it is wonderful that you are using the < div class> nicely to position images in a neatly readable manner. If I could offer one suggestion, however, it would be to use *** to separate key paragraphs which would allow the article to be easier to digest.

I think your content is well polished so I don't have much to comment on that front. I like the references at the bottom, however, it would be nice (though not mandatory) that you include in-text citation as well. You can accomplish this using < sup> and be inserting the number used at the bottom and it would look something like this:

"He said a quote" 1.

You could also go a step further by hyperlinking the in-text citation.

Again, this is just a suggestion from someone that typically uses Chicago formatting style. I know APA doesn't so don't take it as a criticism.

Wrapping Things Up,

Keep posting great articles like these, represent #TeamMalaysia strongly, and best of luck graduating!

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Thank you for the constructive feedback. I'll improve my future articles :)

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