Her - 100 Days of Poetry Challenge Day #9

theverve (41)in #steemitschoolpoetry • 7 years ago (edited)

I wrote this poem this evening for a friend who has been struggling with expressing how he felt to his crush. It was a bit challenging because I'm a girl and I have absolutely no idea how guys feel when they see a girl. This is the first time I have written from outside myself, not using my own emotion or feelings, but making them up. I hope it has not affected the quality of my writing. I hope you enjoy reading this.

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The slant of your neck
The curve of your cheek
The display of priceless pearls that is your smile
Send shockwaves to the very depths of my soul

        The sway of your hips
        The curve of your calf
The undulations that accentuate your femininity
The way you toss your head when you walk
        The carefree way you laugh
        Unravel something deep within me

What it is I do not know
But your eyes
They elicit a response from me
The unfurling of something long dormant
The belief that I can be loved

In your presence is when I’m strongest
        It’s the only place I can be weak without fear
        My imperfections don’t faze you
My foibles, you laugh at them
Your gentle manner, your lilting voice
        They soothe the roaring within me
        When you say my name, my spirits soar
When you touch me, my soul takes flight

And when you smile
Oh God when you smile
        I’m no longer a man
        But a little boy
At your mercy
Knowing I could get hurt
        But risking it all anyway
        Because you're worth the suffering

You’re far from perfect
But the combination of imperfections that is you
Intrigue me no end
You’re the perfect kind of imperfect.

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7 years ago in #steemitschoolpoetry by theverve (41)

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d-pend (73) 7 years ago

This is really well done @theverve. You managed, with simple language, to convey quite accurately the feeling of man under the spell of the woman he adores. (At least, it matches my experience as a male!)

Thanks for prefacing it as you did. Really commendable job writing from a perspective outside yourself! I also enjoyed the indentations of lines, it gave it an interesting and pleasing shape.

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