Ooo a very creepy encounter, the way you tell the story, as though you are telling it directly to the reader, recounting real events, really adds to the story, you do a great job of crafting this in so few words. The little girl with black eyes, who just walks away, it has the feeling of a urban legend, as thought it could feature in a set of stories of people encountering these children, very nicely done.

Welcome to steemit @kayleejade - if you have any questions I would be more than happy to help <3 There is a page that runs writing and poetry contests @bananafish, the next fiction contest is due out soon and we would love to see an entry from you, it's a very welcoming contest and we are always looking for new writers to join us. I very much enjoyed this story and look forward to seeing more from you!