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RE: SPU Poetry Contest #1: "SILENT INFLUENCE "
I have enjoyed your poem. There are some interesting imagery. The poem started off quite strong, "Like a plague she feasts on your ego". I do recommend, however, that if you are going to adopt a rhyme scheme, the rhyming would have to be more consistent. You may use sites like rhymezone or other apps. There were certain times where the rhyme felt it missed a beat, and others where the sentence or line were constructed simply to fit the rhyme. That is a shame, as i see that you have great potential and great imagery!
Smiles... Thank you for the eye opener
It's no lie I try to fit in some rhyme
That's why am on this platform to learn from the grandmaester.. Thanks for reading through.. I am glad
There are other poets that do rhyme (not me) - it would be col to consider changing some rhyme schemes. e.g. ABCB may be somewhat easier to do - if you totally want to use rhyme. It's a personal preference - but if rhyming is chosen, the words have to 'sound' the same, rather than 'look' the same.
Hmmmm.. Noted...