Rosewater (original poetry)

in #poetry7 years ago (edited)


Rosewater




I confide in my love
of you
I emerge within the dream
of you
I collapse into the vacuum
of you
I am in trance, hypnotic to the drone
of you -
I see you in the rosewater
I pour you over clouds
you are the sunset
of my heart's valley,
flying on bird song
to the nadir of
love's pulse -
I am caught under the wake
of you
I am aroused by the crescendo
of you
I am restless to the knowing
of you
l am stoned on sweet grass
of you -
an eternity of movement towards you
with you
as simply as the rain dissolves into
nothing
we are nothing more
than our most tender of desires
actualized,
light into warmth




Health and Love, always
Zameena Zen

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I love the way you defamiliarize common terms and phrases here by varying them just a enough to deconstruct the way they sound and strip the idiom out. It's like all the waves break to the side. For some reason, this really gets me: "I see you in the rosewater - I pour you over clouds." You're consistently refreshing and reinvigorating language, exactly what poetry is supposed to do.

Thank you so much @mdbrantingham - finding writer's such as yourself really inspires me. Your talent is something I really admire, it means a lot that you take the time to read my words. Thank you, truly

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