Poem / Untitled pt 3
Untitled pt 3
Dressing up I see
My reflection stares back at me
Why am I going through the trouble of looking neat
When all I'm really doing is going to greet?
It's nearly half past five
I better hop into my car and take a drive
Wall berry street again
It looks as though there might be some rain
Should I park a couple blocks down
So that I can take my afternoon run around?
The parking lot on fifth seems about right
I just need to park my car in securities sight
Now I can take a stretch
Warm my calves and jog past my usual bench
Six is meet up time
Whatever she is going to say's been on my mind
A quick spray of deodorant
A new change of clothes
A quick brush through my hair
With a fine toothed comb
I've got an umbrella just in case
The grey clouds have started to quicken their pace
There she is
Looking a little in distress
That frown doesn't suit you
Smile a bit it makes you more attractive
With that there was a slight flex in her cheek
She was looking way more distractive
Dressed in a form of casuals today
No court I presume?
Her face changed, She stepped in
I could smell her perfume
I asked if you could meet me here
I've been feeling a bit devoid of cheer
If you came to me to have fun
Let me tell you I'm so dun
I'm just done with my current situation
I need to change my frowny salutation
Is that really all you stopped me for?
My heart started sinking into the floor
Not quite
But I don't have the energy to tell you tonight
All things in due time
Keeping things to yourself isn't a crime
The first drop hit me
Funny enough it made it through all the leaves
We were standing under a massive oak tree
Mind if I put this up?
Pulling out my umbrella
I finally got a good glimpse of her
She looked interstellar
Why would she approach this strange fella?
By Ethan
2017/09/11
That was well written and structured. Great work @xxsenpaixsamaxx !
Part 4 please? I am hooked :D
thats so sweet... good poem with lovely feelings.... keep it up and thanks :)
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A lot of thought and sweetness throughout , always displayed in your poetry that you worked hard :] always the romantic too :]
I missed reading them while I was ill away from steemit, glad I have stopped by before bedtime to read your writing...
you are a great role model to learn from too, with your continued success !
well done and thank you for sharing another love story of yours x
Thank you for checking out my stuff again :D I was wondering what happened... Hope you heal up and/or get well soon :D
Beautiful story
Excellent poem!!
Good story bro. I resteemed it!
I like the part 3 like omg. Haha. Feels like I'm reading a romance book it's just that it's in a poetry version. Can't help but smile while reading the POV of the guy. Lol. I loved itttttt so much, promise, no joke. Will be waiting for part 4. :))
Edited: I have posted a new poem @xxsenpaixsamaxx. I hope you would have a time to visit and comment so I could improve my writing, I believe I could learn a bunch from you. ^^ https://steemit.com/poetry/@littlerph/it-s-over-poem
Thank you very much and do have a nice day!
I'm gonna check it out right now :D I really appreciate your constant support :)
Thank you very much! :) It's because your poems are really nice. I like the narrative part of it and also the cliffhangers haha. Your poems are worth the constant support. ^^ They're all awesome. ;)
Thank you :D
You are very welcome. :)
That was a great poem.
But You made a mistake in the 4th line. It should be "great", right ?
Forgive me for that. I hope you didn't mind.
Sorry. :)
Eyyy XD I don't mind. When i read fast i also skip or misplace words :)
No matter.
Shit happens sometime :D
Keep up the good work !!