Edge of the sun

in #poetry7 years ago

The edge of the sun

 

Those nights we spent late, awake, talking til the morn
Summer, winter, autumn passed, spring of the dawn
Sharpest tongue blunted mind, phrasing with precision
Second guess at the very best often the wrong decision
Every slip was to be punished, every gaffe laid bare
Work upon work to ensure that the best was always there

Close in mind, close in heart but always at arms length
A moment shared a moment passed neither had strength
Time was for another, no time would ever be enough
In a different part of history perhaps, made of different stuff
Further away than can ever be and nearer than very far
Burning hot while blowing cold, winds rushing across the star

Days and years spent longing for nothing but a little more
Stepping back and to the side nature had to prove its law
Too close and get consumed and absorbed into the dark
Never to return from blackness, gone would be the spark
Universes collide in space, gravity of body and galaxy spun
Through words and a memory, mind's fingers burned on sun

Taraz
[ a Steemit original ]

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This one was a little deep
As we get older we look back at where the time went and if we spent it wisely . There is no way to change any of it . you just keep going forward hopefully in the right direction tripping and falling as we go.

The way we have already come is gone with each step. People may want a smooth path forward, it isn't going to be.

We always long for more. It will come. Just a little patience is needed. Sometimes the wrong decisions turn out to be the right ones. We have to spin a positive somewhere.

"Further away than can ever be and nearer than very far"

That sums up how close I am to a ATH lambo

It feels that way for a lot of things at the moment. I don't carea bout Lambos though :P

You have the gift of poetry, that is sublime but mysterious... I imagine his wife is happy for so many compliments even with the years is just as enamored and intrigued in her.

This poem is powerful appreciating nature in its uniqueness. The sun, eye of heaven sun shine. The rhymes scheme used convey the message well and also beautiful the poem. Keep the good work flowing

Hey, you are a brilliant with poetry I loved it. There was a certain music to this poem. I loved the rhyming. :D
Plus the photography was bomb. <3

Now, I am going to go out on a limb here and say that @abhishekjanu and you are the same person.

No, no. I am different. I follow him. He is from India. But no, we're two different people.

Well sir that is really some photography skills you have. And your poetry was heart touching and emotional. Though I had to read it twice to get whatever I could. I see you are talking about someone who is dear and near to you. That is a beautiful emotion. I am looking forward to see more of your poetry. Thank for sharing with all of us.

Now, I am going to go out on a limb here and say that @abhinavmendhe and you are the same person.

Honestly speaking I don't know who he is I suppose that he is from my country too. But a lot of bad stuff is happening today my comments are creating wierd replies. Like earlier I was spotted by a please stop bot and now you link me with this guy. Sorry if I made any wrong comment. I did not mean to make any negative comments. It's my first time on your post.

Stepping back and to the side nature had to prove its law

This line got me. Deep meaning of the poetry is something I really like. The words express. We all have to show out nature in the end.

You cannot hate the great for not been your mate, neither can you discard the mind powerful enough to give a full expression of something thoughtful.

You see what you have caused now.... Smiles

Reading your poem is creating the urge in me to give it a trier....smile

Beautiful lines, if their is one part of me I will love to develop, it has to be this part.. .

Those nights we spent late, awake, talking til the morn

I love this line the most, it reminds me of a time in my life i was in love, i did not have money to buy talktime to call the love of my life, but there was free call that starts by 12am and lasted till 6am, then we will talk for the whole 6hours through the night, those hours used to be everything, and even not enough

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