He gave in, he's beat and so he lingered in
so long, he knows no cares there - it's warm
He bathes in sun truth and time
who lives unwrapped in fearless fragments
at liberty if so he chose, to wander
in to the glowing glass metal bars, or
to lie waiting for revelations again

first off WOOOOOOOOOOOOOT!!!! you published it and no cannot delete it so just for that you made me happy.

as for your poem................. Stop, just STOP being so hard on yourself. Your poem is wonderful and you made it fit your style and didn't compromise your ethics in the doing. So what MORE can you ask for?
Nothing! so suck it up and realize you are a poet and write great things.
Believe! or I will have to smack you in the head! LOLLLLLLL