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RE: I just can't skip, I just won't do it. Day 20.
I LOVED it!
This is your poem with the best meter and rhythm.
And humor ... lovely. Poets spend too much time wallowing in dark and dreary places.
One piece of advice: Write couplets as couplets (two lines)... not 4-line stanzas. The line-breaks are creating "full pauses" where there ought be only half-pauses.
The "power of prosody is in the pause." You must control not only the words, but the silence between them.