Why does this all feel so fake (Day 55 of 100 -- Poetry challenge)
- click the video for the spoken word and image fun.
You are a slippery slope
a crooked yoke
a slanted slab
Your words are crisscrossed
tied knots
tangled tomes
We are seedless fruit
wilted and waterless
wanton yet sterile
Our time is a hollowed home
a gutted rut
a modified myth
a synthetic mist
a secret sickle
a sickly sow
My heart is a burnt stake
a blistered cake
a barren fate
second hand
second rate
severed date
All pieces are newly crafted and posted shortly after in adherence to the rules of the challenge. All the photos are mine unless otherwise stated.
Entry for Day 55 of 100 Days of Poetry Challenge by @d-pend.
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Brava, Mamadini. The height of craft and expression:)
:: Blush :: Thank you. <3
Stillborn love is the saddest of all ...
Truly.
Noooo... not a burnt steak! ;)
I watched the video this time. Drip drip.
hehehe. So, I thought about 'steak' but it seemed to easy, or at least obvious. "burnt stake" has a lot of play, so in the spoken version 'steak' is going to be what most people think and I like that, yet, the intentional use of 'stake' brings in the ideas of stake through the heart, burnt offerings, as well as the many cultures (still) that dispatch corpses with a Stake (the fear of them rising up as ghouls is very real in some places) before interring them to the earth.... I could go on, but you get the picture, it is more complex and yet fits into the piece here, as well as does that wonderful thing that I love so.... Word Play.
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I def heard stake, but I’m intrinsically carnivorous, so I thought of steak. But I don’t want it burnt. And I get the whole metaphor around the charred stake :)
;)
I'll take my steak rare...
Striking poem @mamadini. The video has a haunting effect. I like how the title was never mentioned directly in the poem. That makes me think more about the meaning.
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