(100~DAYS~POETRY~CHALLENGE) [Sir_and_Her] (DAY_#1)

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You told miss how proud you were
You looked at her with pride
For her purity, You called for a feast
And all alone, I watched you watch her.

You walked hand in hand with miss
You'd call her princess
And she wore gorgeous smile, knowing you were her energy
And all alone, I watched you watch her

She's your definition of beauty
Jealousy and envy sprang up whenever she walked into the room
She's Irresistibly charming; one could not deny
Miss walked with no flaws
And all alone, I watched you watch her

Sir, I did boast of you; Having all desirable qualities
Free from flaws
Conforming to the definition of an ideal one
Beyond theoretical advancement, you are excellent
But you never realised how much I need you
And all alone, I watched you watch her

Sir, I learnt to be my energy
I looked at me with pride
And when I walked into the room; the unseen are seen
I walked with hope.

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Sir, you once said I was a queen
But today , I'm a warrior
I guard my heart and fight my emotions
And all alone I keep watch.

Sir, I made mistakes, i paid my price
But regrets and mistakes are memories made
I lost my throne and I lost your gaze.
My heart was ripped.

I dream of the past and all alone I watch you watch her.

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   --Beginner level--

In the above , one could assume its about the poet probably loosing a 'sir' to a lady (miss)
But really, what inspired this poem is a feeling i had when i knew and came to accept one cannot be entirely perfect and can only work to perfection, I've been a lady who always wanted perfection but i broke down at a point due to some circumstances. And sometimes , i think of some failures and I'm tempted to regret some actions. This poem is me personifying 'perfection' as 'sir and perfectionist as 'her'
I really hope you understand, kindly leave your comments or concerns at the reply section

In the above , one could assume its about the poet probably loosing a 'sir' to a lady (miss)
But really, what inspired this poem is a feeling i had when i knew and came to accept one cannot be entirely perfect and can only work to perfection, I've been a lady who always wanted perfection but i broke down at a point due to some circumstances. And sometimes , i think of some failures and I'm tempted to regret some actions. This poem is me personifying 'perfection' as 'sir and perfectionist as 'her'
I really hope you understand, kindly leave your comments or concerns at the reply section ]

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Special shout out to,
@enoch158 and @skodie for threatening me to be a part of this
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Wow, It's quite the poem. Very catchy, very grabbing. Was totally mislead until you mentioned the use of personification. Looking forward to see more.

Sure ..and thanks 😀@nigtroy

I love that you personified this drive towards perfection. Your your use of sir and miss gave the poem a life. It drew me in. Good job.

Thank you.. I'll do my best to draw you in more often😊

Great poem. And I love the meaning. The personification was very well played!!

I'm glad you love the meaning. ..thanks soo much for enjoying this ..@keciah

Striving for perfection only creates more flaws. I loved it. Great piece

Thanks friend @skodie i used to hate failures .. so i could say, perfectionist(miss) was me and sir was my man but then i accepted failures and got to know some kind of perfectionism is bad. Obviously i broke sir's heart by refusing to be miss ..so he found another miss, and all alone i watched him watch her.

Nice write up. I think I can use your style to woo a girl.

Hehe..thank you. ....good luck ok 😀

Nice poem,am really in touch with it.keep it up.

Wow.. This is lovely.. There is a certain touch of personality that you added to this poem and it is simply awesome... Well done



@ajremy (the teen with steam for steem)

Thanks soo much.. i like that you really follow the poem.. all the best ok.

Hi @icequeenlove great piece, full of emotion. So glad you included the reading notes so I could know about your personification. Thank you for embarking on this journey with us :-)

Placed you in the Beginner category. All the best!!!

Thank you very much sir.. its a great privilege. I'll do my best to join the class at the appointed time. Except for today i will be gone for rehearsals. Pardon. Thanks once again. And im beleiving to win oneday .

What a beautiful poem... I really loved it... and until your addition of the footnotes I would have assumed it as you guessed - that is was between a 'her' and a 'him.

Powerful use of words. I like it a lot and I really look forward to reading more from you.

Keep it up! You have a definite talent :)

With Love
Hart Floe Poet
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Im glad you loved it .. thank you soo much.. ill do my best to get better. ☺ .. and hey I'm waiting to read your next poem 💪

I really did! You don't even have to try... you're naturally going to get better and better if you keep writing every day! I'm excited to see your progression over the next 97 days!

Awww that's sweet... in that case - head on over and read my submission for day 3 then... It's waiting for you!

Thanks for your continued support... means a lot to me!

We in this together :)

With Love
Hart Floe Poet
<3

😊😊😊😊... whoa ..ok.. off to read your submission ..and I'm really late for my 3rd entry i should start any moment from now.. see ya

Haha... you're not late yet.. you still got half a day at least :D

I look forward to reading it when it's ready!

Good luck! :)

With Love
Hart Floe Poet
<3

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