"Wooden" --- Original Poem
Leaves fell
Inside my heart;
A vortex of decay loomed
And the onlookers sighed sitting
On beach towels observing the river
Swallowing red-orange brittle-fine tears
Branches shivered their feeble strength
In the face of a gentle gust which caressed
Their hurtless wounds with calm assurance.
Roots rejoiced in their happy packet, that
Earth eternal singing mineral bliss
Below, where sweet darkness
Held tight her progeny
The clinging love
Which stings.
Image: free domain
Once again d-pend, you show such great capacity to feel and express. I am deeply touched by such deep ability to connect with your inner being. Your picture and poem gave me such a moment of feelings that can't be expressed. You have so much inside of you and I feel your need to bring all these emotions and experiences to the surface. I really hope you do. Your other article talked about nature. We can all learn so much from nature's ability to create, let go of the old, and then move forward and create again. You are really a very gifted person! On a side note, today I posted something that gave me great happiness. The article was about the old days when I was growing up. Those days were simpler and happier for me. I can't write poems like you, but I can remember wonderful moments. We should both do things that make us happy and whole.....Cabbagepatch!
Fall is my favorite time of the year, these pictures resonated with me deeply. I am always wishing for fall, which is when I truly come alive. Thank you @d-pend for the eye candy of nature in one of its most beautiful outfits.
"In the face of a gentle gust which caressed
Their hurtless wounds with calm assurance."
Love this part
Wow! I can feel the carefully chosen nature of each word in every single line. I love the imagery, especially the first stanza. I will definitely follow! :) If you have some spare time, I have some poetry of mine on my profile.
Love how u build up the sentences and then made them smaller again :)
Thanks! I like experimenting with triangle structures. Another poet that does it very well is @jerrytsuseer. He likes to use a descending triangle structure that is very cool...
I once did one adding one more word with each sentence. Just love to make those different kind of poems experimenting with it :) Might try something like this sometime
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I love this poem. It is beautiful, and it makes me wonder... thanks! I love "swallowing red-orange brittle-fine tears." And I didn't notice until @droucil pointed it out, but awesome use of visual effect with the lines. I have a question: what is the clinging love that stings?