Whoah...i like how you capture the magic of sunset in this poem.

Your choice of words really gives one sound imagery not forgetting the pictures too.

The simplicity of your diction too is worth applauding hence in its own way it contributes to the elegance of your style.

Day’s last breath
Softly whispers
Into the harsh, cold dark night
I will return.

And i think this amazing last stanza can be interpreted from the standpoint of light at the end of the tunnel, of glory after hardship, of healing after pain. The day must return after each and every of our harsh, cold, dark nights.

Good job ma'am.