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RE: I tell myself I know

in #poetry7 years ago

Beautiful photograph with a beautiful poem.

Face in face to face we sit together close

This line reminds me of a DMT trip I had, very interesting use of imagery.

Release muscles and lie back into grass
Ants crawl endlessly into holes in the skin

I really like your use of imagery and the way you paint your words.

The flow was a little choppy, but I felt it added to the poem rather than detracted.

Thank you for sharing!

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And thank you for your reply. This was written recalling a experience that happened in a blur of excitement.

Also, on the feedback on the choppiness is taken with gratitude! It was not intended, but I'm glad it is appreciated :D

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