This is beautiful and very solid. The depth of the subjects touched upon can be felt, and it is evident that you know, from experience, what it is you are talking about.

The first stanza nicely sets the mood for the poem and gives a glimpse into what the poem will be about; that heavy burden. As we go into the second stanza, your concern for the other person not to get caught up in the adversities you are facing is stunning. It takes a lot to take on sever pain for another to feel like they are in 'paradise'.

The third and last stanzas flow nicley together, creating a vivid image of a wounded soul that is struggling and fighting without any results, yet a soul that acknowledges its position and is wary of inflicting pain on another.

The immense care and love are two primal emotions which outshine the reoccuring theme of hopelesness in the poem. You truly did a great job and put together a fine piece of art.

Thanks for sharing!

If you have some time, I invite you to have a look at my blog as I am back on Steem now after being away for a while and have a lot in store for the upcoming weeks!

Once again, thank you!

Lukasz.