Steemit Open Mic Week 98 – Unseen (The Good Fight) – Original

in #openmic6 years ago (edited)

This is a truly vulnerable share – one of my most candid songs to date.

It's brand new, and a bit of a departure for me in that...I generally end with some kind of hopeful, uplifting sentiment. That just didn't happen with this one. It's simply my raw truth...

I keep typing sentences, then erasing them; straining to pen some deeper explanation. Perhaps...I should just let the song speak for itself.

From my heart to yours – thank you for listening.

xo, Zippy

~ fair warning – if swearing upsets you, you might want to skip the last 30 seconds or so. ~



Unseen (The Good Fight)

there's a darkness that plagues my soul
something ancient and unkind
like the gravity of a black hole
it's been drawing me in all my life

I feel like a star that's collapsing
slowly losing my light
but still...tryin' to burn bright

there's an ocean of shame so deep
the tears of a thousand lifetimes
like a riptide, unseen
it's been pullin' me astray all my life

it's hard to keep my head above water
while the current keeps getting stronger
I'm just tryin' not to drown

so, here I am – in the boxing ring
throwing punches with the shadows
flailing against invisible things
weakened by these unseen battles

like a boxer, in the final round
broken and pinned to the ground
I'm just tryin' not to tap out

now – I'm just so fuckin' exhausted
but I'm still tryin' so hard to be alright
so – please – don't give up on me yet
'cause I promise – I'm fighting the good fight

I promise....I'm fightin' the good fight


~ Heartfelt thanks to @luzcypher, @krystle, @soundlegion, @passion-ground,
@verbal-d, @meno & @pfunk for all you do. ~

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Oh, my sweet twin friend, Zippy. If this doesn't win first place in open mic like I feel it should, then just know right now and here that I am saying to the world that it is first place in MY HEART.

I'm here for you anytime you ever need to talk. God knows you've been here for me and I'm a damn stubborn pain in the ass ... I wanna be here for you.

Your beautiful song speaks to me, truly. It is SO GREAT to see you back playing again. Keep going!!

Thank you for sharing your special gifts and your vulnerability with us all.

Sending love and healing light your way,
Never give up,
♥-Serena

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Your warm heart is a gift of the most precious kind, my dearest Serena. <3 Thank you.

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naaw, so adorable. get a room :P

Really so very emotional and heartfelt, sometimes even the hardest times can be a little easier when shared - I hope you find something positive to look forward to.

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Thank you @c0ff33a – I appreciate your kindness. <3

I second that, coffee. Those were very sweet words. Beautiful song. Thank you for sharing. Such a lovely and pure voice.

@zipporah
Powerful
Vulnerability
Beautiful in the real
Heart Strings.
Wow.
😙

Thank you for listening @annephilbrick. <3

Thank You....!!!
I have listened to your song three times over..
😙
Awakened feelings .

That is pretty much the best compliment a songwriter can ask for. ;)

Wow. It’s so brave of you to be so vulnerable and share part of your struggle through music. I’m going to be perfectly honest... I’ve never actually checked out your profile and I had no idea you were a musician. I see your photography pretty often and have even helped my husband choose several of your photos for his #portaitcontest. You are a woman of many talents! Keep on burning bright! I truly look forward to seeing and hearing more from you. Thank you for sharing a piece of yourself in this beautiful song ❤️

What a lovely message! Thank you, @melodyrussell. <3 I haven't entered that contest too often, but you just reminded me that I have a sepia portrait to submit. Hope I'm not too late! • Pleased to 'meet' you. ;)

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Beautiful and Brave. 💕

(There's nothing else to be said.)

Your 'blanket of love' is deeply felt and well-received. <3

You kinda wrecked me with this, Zippy...
I love it...
I'm tryin' not to tap out too...
You're alright, girlfriend!

Is it strange that even this comment made me cry a little? Of course, my intention wasn't to wreck people, only to express a thing that has mostly been inexpressible and, hopefully, help others feel ever so slightly less alone.

Deeply grateful for your kind words, @passion-ground. <3

It was a good sort-of heartfelt wrecking... ;-)

the highest compliment, to be sure. <3

Love your lyrics. Even though this is a very sad song, to hear you sing it in such an angelic voice and uplifting melody is therapeutic as one can feel the healing with each note. Please, don't ever stop playing and writing. I believe it's good for you and for others who hear it.

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It means a lot to receive such lovely feedback from you, dear @luzcypher. <3

Sharing this song is very much part of my medicine. I recorded several takes, and just kept breaking down. I think this was the only take that I introduced using the word 'depression.' I can't recall now if I said it in this one, but in some takes, I mentioned that I was choosing to share, despite the vulnerability of doing so – because it feels important, and worth the risk for the possibility that someone might hear this and perhaps feel a little bit less alone.

Love to you. xo!

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Thank you, sooo much! I'm sincere when I say I didn't expect this. <3 My gratitude runs deep.

I can feel your sadness here @zipporah, in your soulful voice and words to this song. I admire you sharing your vulnerability, and I truly hope that somehow this helps you win this battle.

On a purely technical note, your singing made me teary and the final, quick eye contact you made was so touching; I didn't even know you could sing :) Such a heartfelt rendition. Thank you for sharing. Sending big internet hugs and positive vibes your way. <3

I'm also submitting this to c-squared; I'm sure they'll pay you a visit.

I appreciate all the hugs I can get – even the virtual ones. <3

It does feel like a crucial part of my self-care...to share in this way. The fact that doing so scared me was only confirmation of its importance.

Thank you for taking time to listen to the sound of my aching heart.

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Oh @zipporah, I do hope your heart stops aching soon ❤️

My dearest Zippy! This song is incredibly poignant and correlates beautifully to your recent struggles and obstacles. Now that I have emotions again after 5 years on ADs I can now cry freely and soak up others emotions and feelings! The empathy I have for others is pretty intense, and to that end, I thanks you for releasing these feelings from depths of my music feels.
This was a seriously amazing performance, deeply poetic lyrics, great guitar playing with video and crystal HD sound.
Bravo @zipporah Bravo my dear friend, you smashed!

DC

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photography by © 2017 Darren Claxton

Big love to you, Dax! Your heart is as vibrant and golden as that gorgeous flower. Looks to be a nasturtium, yes? ;)

I have been a few days out in the wild... no internet, just me, the mountains and the sky... I needed to think... So I was now slowly checking my feed and got a treat!

You are my winner this week, this has to win open mic
I almost cried before you even started to cry... we know the "dark place", I have some "companion songs" and know the feeling of not "knowing it they will overwhelm me" but that's the magic of it, the vulnerable, the honesty of it.
Gasp for air, because sometimes the undertow is strong, but we´ll make it to the surface.
Healing wishes....
deep breath
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Thank you, Pris. <3 I'd love to hear your 'companion' songs. • It's funny – the undertow/riptide difference really messed with me in this song. It came out first as a' river' with a 'rip tide unseen' that's been 'pullin' me down'. But riptides are in the ocean, and they pull you out not down. Undertows are in rivers, and they pull you down. So I experimented with a lot of variations, trying to find the right feel, while also being accurate. In the end, I wanted to make riptide work, because it was the nicest alliteration, so...I just figured out how to make it work. :)

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