Task 2: 1,82/2
Excellent story, and more, because it covers what was requested in the assignment: almost extreme conciseness.
I learned a lot from your reflections, referring to the grammatical construction of English, which is not my native language. Thank you.
Now, you know me... Where is the title? I have been very incisive in that regard. 😂
I know your insight, and I'm surprised you'll overlook it.
For example, playing with the Recipient, the sender and the subject, those words are not charged, because they are part of the telegram.
As for the rest, my friend, reading that you are enjoying it, and reading about your dedication, fills me with joy, that was the main idea when creating this Learning Workshop.
However, I differ on one sentence:
"as it was a telegraphic version without any kind of expression"
That's fine, for a real telegram, the challenge for the micro-story author is to write expressively or generate some emotion or reaction, even with a grammar against it.
A difficult challenge, which you overcame well by generating smiles with your telegram.
Then it's not negligence on my part, I read and read multiple times. I think I didn't understand. So it's maybe "dumbness" on my part ;))
Thank you so very much for the evaluation. I appreciate everything about this challenge :)