Of Humor and Love

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Assalamualaikum Wr. Wb.

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Pergi sekarang?


Ibu Rahmi guru agama.
Dalam kelas dia menceritakan tentang surga dan neraka, dia bertanya "siapa yang mau masuk surga?" semua angkat tangan kecuali Rio.
Untuk meyakinkan dia tanya lagi"siapa yang suka surga?" Rio belum menjawab. ibu Rahmi mendatangi Rio "Rio apa kamu mau masuk surga?" dengan mengangguk dia bertanya "Apa kita akan pergi sekarang?


Saya mencoba memahami Telegram yang di maksud, dulu saat saya masih remaja saya pernah mendapat telegram dari teman-teman jauh mengucapkan kata selamat ulang tahun untuk saya, tulisannya singkat, biasa aja dan tidak menarik, tapi karena dia tinggal nya jauh dan ingin saya segera menerima ucapan selamat ulang tahun maka dia menggunakan telegram, padahal jika dia kirim menggunakan kartu itu jelas lebih baik dan bagus tentunya.

Namun sekarang saya menemukan aplikasi telegram di android saya, tulisannya boleh panjang bahkan kita dapat
mengirim video dengan durasi di atas 1 jam.
Jadi saya coba menduga telegram yang di maksud adalah telegram zaman dulu saat handphone belum ada.

saya mencoba memikirkan cerita apa yang akan saya kirim melalui telegram, harus cerita humor, tapi harus pendek, pertanyaannya apakah telegram yang pendek itu dapat di pahami oleh pembaca, karena sudah pendek dan harus humor. karena saya guru agama di sekolah, saya coba membuat cerita lucu dari pembicaraan anak di sekolah dan saya tambah sedikit, semoga ini berhasil dan dapat di pahami oleh pembaca.


Aku cemburu


Saat kau menatapku, jiwaku bergetar. Kau berjalan dengannya memamerkan kemesraan. aku disini merindukan kehangatanmu, hatiku terbakar karena marah dan cemburu. Tunggu dan lihat saja aku akan merebut mu darinya. kau akan merasakan percikan api di mataku.


Catatan :

Ketika aku di haruskan membuat cerita berdasarkan puisi yang berjudul api di tatapanmu, ada perasaan takut salah mengartikan isi puisi, berkali-kali aku baca kembali apa isi yang terkandung di dalamnya. sehingga aku mengambil kesimpulan jika puisi ini adalah kecemburuan wanita yang di khianati. Aku melihat ada 3 peran utama di dalam puisi tersebut. Yaitu :

  1. Aku, bisa jadi si aku tersebut sebagai mantan pacar yang melihat pacarnya berjalan dengan wanita lain, sehingga si aku sangat cemburu. dia mengingat saat dulu masih bersama kekasihnya, masih merasakan aroma tubuhnya, kehangatannya, kegairahannya di tempat tidur. dan si aku ingin mencoba untuk merebut kembali pacarnya dengan menyingkirkan wanita tersebut dan yakin pacarnya akan kembali ke pelukannya lagi.

  2. Kamu, adalah pacar si aku, yang berkhianat meninggalkan si aku, si kamu sudah memiliki kekasih baru yang selalu diajak berkencan, jalan-jalan dan makan berdua. Si kamu tidak takut orang lain melihat mereka, tidak peduli jika si aku juga melihatnya berpegang tangan, karena si kamu sudah tidak peduli lagi pada si aku.

  3. Dia, adalah selingkuhan si kamu, si Dia terbawa arus kemarahan si aku, tanpa diketahuinya, Dia menyangka si kamu adalah lelaki yang hanya miliknya seorang dan tidak menyangka jika si aku akan menyingkirkannya dengan menusuk perutnya sampai mati.

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Demikian pak guru @joslud dan ibu @solperez, jawaban dari latihan yang anda berikan, semoga kalian bisa menerimanya dan saya mendapat nilai yang di harapkan. Saya akan bersenang hati jika kalian mau memberitahukan saya kesalahan yang saya buat dan saya siap memperbaikinya.


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Going Now?


Mrs. Rahmi a religion teacher.
In class she told about heaven and hell, she asked "who wants to go to heaven?" everyone raised their hands except Rio.
To make sure she asked again "who likes heaven?" Rio not answer. Mrs. Rahmi came to Rio "Rio do you want to go to heaven?" while nodding he asked "we going now?"


I tried to understand what Telegram meant, when I was a teenager I used to get telegrams from distant friends wishing me a happy birthday, the writing was short, ordinary and uninteresting, but because he lived far away and wanted me to immediately receive birthday greetings then he used a telegram, even though if he sent it using a card it was clearly better and better of course.

But now I found the telegram application on my android, the writing can be long and we can even send videos with a duration of over 1 hour.
send videos with a duration of over 1 hour.
So I tried to guess that the telegram in question was an old telegram when cellphones didn't exist yet.

I tried to think of what story I would send via telegram, it must be a humorous story, but it must be short, the question is whether the short telegram can be understood by the reader, because it is short and must be humorous. because I am a religious teacher at school, I tried to make a funny story from the conversation of children at school and I added a little, hopefully this will work and can be understood by the reader.

I am jealous


When you look at me, my soul trembles. You walk with her flaunting intimacy. I am here longing for your warmth, my heart burning with anger and jealousy. Just wait and watch as I snatch you away from him. You will feel the sparks in my eyes.


Note:

When I had to make a story based on a poem entitled fire in your gaze, there was a feeling of fear of misinterpreting the contents of the poem, many times I re-read what was contained in it. so I came to the conclusion that this poem is the jealousy of a betrayed woman. I see three main roles in the poem. They are:

  1. I, could be the me as an ex-girlfriend who sees her boyfriend walking with another woman, so the me is very jealous. she remembers when she was still with her boyfriend, still feels the scent of his body, his warmth, his excitement in bed. and the me wants to try to reclaim her boyfriend by getting rid of the woman and believes her boyfriend will return to her arms again.

  2. You, is the girlfriend of the me, who betrayed the me, the you already have a new lover who is always invited to date, travel and eat together. You are not afraid of others seeing them, don't care if I also see them holding hands, because you don't care about me anymore.

  3. He, is your mistress, He was carried away by my anger, without knowing it, He thought that you were a man who belonged only to him and did not expect that I would get rid of him by stabbing his stomach to death.

Thus, teacher @joslud and mother @solperez,
This is the answer to the exercise you gave, hopefully you can accept it and I get the expected score. I will be happy if you want to tell me the mistakes I made and I am ready to fix them.

Saya mengundang @jyoti-thelight, @fantvwiki dan @crismenia untuk mengikuti Write in micro size 03 | SLC S21W03. salam hormat

@ifatniza

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Greetings @ifatniza

Task 2: 1.68/2

You have done a very productive and impressive job, I liked reading your research on old telegrams. If that's what it was about, a very concise way of sending messages. Your version of the telegram is a bit different from the way they were written, without so many details, just the necessary information.
But it's pretty good, it's understandable and provokes humor and reflection.
If you want to make any corrections, just ask.

Task 3: 2,84/3

I really see that you had a hard time with the translations, but you did a magnificent job, you capture the essence of the poem and give it a twist by bringing it to a story.
I really liked your reflection and the "exegesis" you do with the characters in it.
Good job.

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