This was a nice write may I make two tiny suggestions though

1- I feel that the flow of the whole piece gets snagged a bit by the second line of the second stanza.

his presence excited the whole being

While I understand that you wanted to flesh out the kind of excitement it felt to me that the piece would fair better if you left the description out-

his presence excited

also it might be good if you added a title to your writing notes or a spacer between them and the Poem <3