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RE: The Choice of the gods

in #life7 years ago

The plot of your story is very good, @photon12. I mean this, very good....

It is, one could say in the sentence, the story of a some god directed, arbitrarily human arranged marriage that ordains a young powerless but obliged girl into a future of misfortune.....

That is a classic mirror of Traditional African mindset. It is a a good story. I like how you accelerate and achieve the climax towards the end.

One thing though, i feel you crowded in so many characters, it makes following the story, and keeping up with the names some what cumbersome, never mind the twist-twig of your Nigerian - Nigerian, i guess, names.

Some Characters would have done, without names, so as to unify, but also to ensure that the main characters clearly stood out.

Cheers!

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Thank you so much for your comment Sir, I will work on the things you have mentioned, it can only get better. Meanwhile you could also check my post on music- the food for the soul, it should have what you need.Thanks
https://steemit.com/music/@photon12/music-the-food-for-the-soul-516f43b3af61a
That's the link.

Okay @photon12. I am honored.

let me check out that link. Thanks

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