The plot of your story is very good, @photon12. I mean this, very good....
It is, one could say in the sentence, the story of a some god directed, arbitrarily human arranged marriage that ordains a young powerless but obliged girl into a future of misfortune.....
That is a classic mirror of Traditional African mindset. It is a a good story. I like how you accelerate and achieve the climax towards the end.
One thing though, i feel you crowded in so many characters, it makes following the story, and keeping up with the names some what cumbersome, never mind the twist-twig of your Nigerian - Nigerian, i guess, names.
Some Characters would have done, without names, so as to unify, but also to ensure that the main characters clearly stood out.
Cheers!
Thank you so much for your comment Sir, I will work on the things you have mentioned, it can only get better. Meanwhile you could also check my post on music- the food for the soul, it should have what you need.Thanks
https://steemit.com/music/@photon12/music-the-food-for-the-soul-516f43b3af61a
That's the link.
Okay @photon12. I am honored.
let me check out that link. Thanks