Sometimes I don’t understand your poems but still I enjoy reading them. They feel like there is something deep that these words wants to portray but my human brain ain’t that intelligent right now to understand it. But i still try my best.
By the way, in the second paragraph last sentence, the word “set” if deleted, journeys will rhyme with dreamed.
I think it would sound better then. Just my opinion.
I'm honored that you read them even if you find them confusing. I do my best to simplify where possible, because I want them to be understood. And I usually add the interpretation notes now, but for this one, I opted not to, because the meaning is quite personal.
Really appreciate the suggestion for the alteration as well! Cheers.