I wished I had read the parts before this concluding part. I would have enjoyed the story much more.

I appreciate the effort you put into this fiction, it not easy writing stories in part. You have written well.

Thanks for sharing with us dear @katiewest

Observation/Recommendation

Do well to break your writeup even into smaller paragraph and give rooms for white space. This make it easy to read and very presentable. You can check out this review for better understanding.