Story Review by Dinaks44

in CampusConnect2 years ago (edited)

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In the eye of the storm

Hello guys thank you for reading again I really appreciate. see the link for the last chapter.Chapter 7.

Review chapter8


Setting:

In the late eighteen hundreds, Britain -London in the early Victoria era


Characterization:

Lilly linton /Mr linton
Mr Ambrose
Patsy
Ella
Mr stones


Plot

TRAVEL PLANS

It starts off with lily going into a store to buy somethings, she first asked for a watch with no design just plain then mimicked mr Ambrose on a mirror which the attendant was looking at her weirdly. Next she asked if she looked good or needed to look more fashionable which the store owner agreed on and she went to the men’s dressing room and made a change and got herself a tailcoat which she loved so much , she was asked if there was any other thing which she answered “do you have solid chocolate “.
Back at home she was asked where she got the money to buy all this by Ella and her friends she told them to not worry which was ok by the others except for patsy , one of her friends. she shared the chocolate with her sister and friends and patsy thought that was a bribe to make her overlook the question until she took a bite and she forgot her troubles.
She went to work early with her new dress and walked pass mr Ambrose and he expression change on sighting lily ,she asked if there was any trouble with a seductive look on her face and he just bluntly said get to work.
He sent her on errands on files every second a message to bring a new file , this weakened lily just because she knew he wanted to get rid of her but she kept doing it without complain (that’s a lie actually) then a message popped up written “Mr linton we would be embarking on a journey to Africa tomorrow “,lily was confused and walked into his office without knocking an hitting the door to the wall, raising up the message she asked what that is, he explains they will be going to Egypt and she will be following him. She says she can’t go because of her aunt and the last time she went on a journey . He then tell her it’s for a month stay and if she doesn’t come he will have mr stones prepare her resignation papers reminding her off when she took the money and the decision that followed. He tell her too bad they will never see each other again by tomorrow because of her speechlessness as she just leaves the room.

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 2 years ago 

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I look forward to reading your future posts.

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