Your content is good and you have highlighted the main points starting a business, moreover your summary is also highlights the business in Pakistan.

• In Pakistan Lahore and Karachi are the main markets for business, in punjab there are more cities producing businesses; Sialkot, Multan, Gujranwala and Faisalabad(famous for cloth market).

• Government should also provide huge capital and market spaces in other provinces as well.

• Own business startup; you mentioned collecting knowledge of legal business, culture and product market, which are very necessary.

• Best of luck for the contest.