Hello gonomil,

I thoroughly enjoyed your microstory. The struggle to make the story concise is what we all have been enduring :)

I will share what I have learnt so far: The choice of genre, microfiction is well-suited for the compact nature of the story. The format allows us quickly present a situation, highlight the character's emotional turmoil, and leave room for suspense. However, as you yourself have noted, achieving conciseness in a microstory can be a challenge. While the emotional depth is strong, some sentences could benefit from trimming to maintain brevity. For example, instead of listing multiple emotions in one sentence ("dolida, molesta y enfurecida"), a single, well-chosen word could convey the same feeling more effectively.

I have recently experimented with monologue. I could say, for instance, the reader doesn't need to know every aspect of Esther's planning at this stage - showing her actions or using a brief but powerful internal monologue could be more impactful.

These are just my humble opinions.

I wish you luck in this challenge.

_{@joslud @solperez, I hope you don't mind my suggestions. We are all learning here #microwrite04}