Nice story though it could use some editing in order for it to be more “digestible”. By the way yesterday I have open the registration for the DnD like game for Steemit I’ve been working on and I’m seeking all the talented authors and lovers of storytelling. I would be honoured if you joined :).
Thanks for the response. And I agree, it needs editing. I hope it isn't shameful to say, but I am posting notes/first drafts of a larger piece here to gauge response, see how it flows, etc, so your comments are warmly welcomed. I'd love to join your DnD style game! I don't know if you are familiar with the movie Gamers: Dorkness Rising, but I edited that film. It's made by genuine gamers and lovers of role RPGs, not at all a derogatory or mocking film. You might like it.
In that case next time I’ll try to review the content of the text rather than its looks. Yet another document added to my to-read/watch-list today. Perfect, see you in the registration post then :).