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RE: Day 860: 5 Minute #Freewrite: Thursday - Prompt: barn door
Excellent piece, short yet flowered with elements of personification carefully crafted by the novelist.
I must commend you on your dexterity in the use of imagery, but I am however not satisfied with this comparison, I guess you can edit it cause it's not balanced.
the contentions between doing what he had been taught in his Christian faith and doing what he had been taught by much older scripture - celibate and sinless or tainted with blasphemy.
Christian faith and older scripture.
By the way is there a thing like older scripture?
Looking forward to hearing from you soon.
Yeah...
If I'm being honest, most of my creative process is to generate as much as I can while keeping an eye out for language. I only go back and edit occasionally. This was one of the sections I went back and edited because I was uncomfortable with how it came out, but I only worsened it.
I was thinking about expanding on this for a short story though, so keep your eyes peeled. There may be something crafted just a bit better.
(And I guess there could be older scripture, but what I had in mind while composing was not older scripture, so... Ya got me.)
Hey, I really appreciate the feedback though. I need every constructive comment I can get and this is by far one of the more helpful comments. Thank you!
First time I received a comment that proves that the person whose work I commented understood my comment and knew the content. I appreciate your prompt response. I look forward to reading more of your creative writing cause I am sure that there will be stuffs I would learn there to help better my writing as well.
Big ups.
Thank you for your resteem and your comments. I will look for your work and add what constructive criticism I can.
Thanks again!
Thank you for thanking me. I would look out for more contents. Bless you.