83 Freewrite - Nose ring
Her nose ring was cold upon my cheek, as she pecked me goodbye for the final time. "There's nothing better than what can be lost, and I'm lost beyond where you can find me"
I cradled her in a hugging position, "Sweetheart you know I can bring you back from whatever darkness is alluring you...Please, stay with me."
She shuddered with chill bumps as she looked me in the eye, saying, "There's no way you can bring me somewhere I don't want to go. We're on separate paths now, and yours is towards unity."
An airplane flew by overhead, and the rain which before seemed to not effect me suddenly made me sneeze. She didn't want to merge into spirit with me, and I realized that I didn't want to merge with her. The wind blew hard from the east, and I saw fully how much my life was going to change from her being my focal point to union with spirit being my focus.
Having someone else as a focal point never works in my opinion. You have to find within yourself your own sancta sanctorum. My opinion :-) Well done! Very intimistic bravo!
Thank you f3nix !
Very well written! Nice post. It's true, we can't take others where they don't want to go. @markrmorrisjr love it!
Thank you very much for the upvote and comment!
Consent and unity are essential in this new age of AI, etc...
great
i just upvoted post and follow you.
return the favour.
@qami
I got you @qami
Very poetical, though a bit sad. I've to agree with @f3nix. My opinion is that searching the complete merging between two spirits isn't the right way to live a relationship. Good writing!
Well, the 'right' way is hard to find :)
Thanks for the comment - sorry for not reading any of yours yet - been so busy I can only post and respond to comments!
Don't worry, I've been so busy I couldn't even post! ;)
I followed you here from a comment you left @dolphinschool . The screen name captured me. You deserved my vote for the above piece...it brought my thoughts back in time to a similar farewell...Regards, @angryman
Great! I'm glad that I listened to the advice of @dolphinschool and @markmorrisjr and left the comments with link!
Moreso though I'm glad that my story led you to a memory; even if it was unpleasant
A memory "unpleasant" in some ways...yet rewarding in other ways...Regards @angryman Keep the posts flowing.
Very true...
There are paths we need to take alone.
I'm glad that you resonated with my post :) Thank you for stopping by!
She's a great poet, lonestar..
Wow. This is quite beautiful. Sad, but so well written and emotive. Really great post!
I’m helping marianne out today and visiting freewriters, here is the prompt for the next freewrite!
https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-84-5-minute-freewrite-thursday-prompt-sound-check
:) Thank you Byn I love your feedback!
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That is an intense good bye!
Pure fiction :)
Thank you