RE: The War On Christmas - Finish The Story #68
Well, am I glad to see your continuation? I was thoroughly confused with the prompt.
So, "Santa is dead" just meant that he became brain dead - became a monster and started to eat elves. Ok, but what does this have to do with freezing of elves' dormitory?
See, I am not familiar with the original fairytale. How was the dormitory heated up before this ordeal has happened? What did it have to do with Santa? Or was he the one who paid the heating bill?
After all, this toy factory was on the North pole, which isn't a warm place, to begin with.
Also Santa's dynasty? I somehow thought that the factory was a socialistic structure. So elves weren't getting paid per se but only were given a basic survival ration: a place in a dorm, a small ration of food and that's it.
I also was confused with Rudolf shooting the errors. How could a caribou do it with his hooves?
Also, what is the penetrating power of cane spear? Can it do any damage to
Santa Monster?
Dude its a piece of Christmas Fiction for a competition that's supposed to be a bit of fun.
For me, the fun starts with an understanding of the initial conditions: remove everything impossible (even in the scheme of a fantastic reality) and find out what has really happened however improbable it could be. Otherwise, the resulting fantasy will be flat and shabby. )))
it's fiction
I got it now and am writing the continuation. Hope you'll be happy with it. )))