I very much enjoyed the direction you set off in here, Blayne lacking a psionic sensitivity, it is such a simple explanation for the way Nox viws him and it is so perfect, and then the way everyone views and treats him compounding Sedra's attraction to him. It feels so real, it just sets the twist here up perfectly. And damn, what a twist. A show stealing ending for sure ;)
Sedra looked back wistfully at him. "I wish. Something bad always seems to happen."
I just adore this remark on main characters and their turmoil filled lives, and although the twist should perhaps break the fourth wall, it doesn't feel like it does either. Just seriously well done!
Thank you. Fourth wall tricks are often cheap but not necessarily boring. I wanted to experiment with the deliberate change in perspective and a partially self-aware character offered a good effect/words ratio. Really glad you liked this one!
I remember S. King in the Black Tower saga with his 4th Wall tricks about himself. I wasnt bothered at all.. it all depends by a certain sense of measure I guess.
You used The Well like a Fontana's cut. This was magic for me. Really awesome and I wont add more.
Cazzo devi metterti a scrivere, davvero.
Comincia tu! 😆
Partiamo insieme? Ho fatto un incubo ricorrente fighissimo ma non so svilupparci una trama intorno 😜 Tutto ok per il resto Ale?
Tutto ok, incasinato come al solito. Buttati sul nanowrimo, parte tra poco! 😈
Vero! Per adesso mi sto dedicando a cose più importanti: qua in ufficio ho creato degli stickers con la faccia dell'ispettore commerciale e intendo disseminarli per tutti gli uffici. Comunque scriverò i risultati di questa edizione perduta nel fine settimana (credo). Brisby é letteralmente scomparsa..