@OriginalWorks Fiction Writing Contest #1: The Invisible Meeting

in #fiction7 years ago

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It had started at school, the class had started to ignore her and she had slowly, steadily and oh so surely started to slide out of existence. She still went to classes but even her teachers did not see her anymore. Coming home in the evening her mother would leave out a meal, she would eat it, go to bed and when she got up in the morning her mother would still be sleeping from her nightshift. Every day she just got less and less until here she was invisible and living a life of lonliness. Her mother had passed away and no-one had came to the funeral, she could remember standing at the grave with the priest saying a final Amen and he walked away and as if a final nail had been hammered into her own life her total and absolute invisibility was sealed from then on in.

The man sat at work on his own, typing meaningless words into the screen, he could hear laughter in the cubicles behind him, but that laughter never made it’s way to his own cubicle. “You coming for break”, “You heading to the pub tonight”, “What did you do over the weekend” these words never coming his way, he worked eight hours a day five days a week, his money electronically sent to his account each month. Breakfast on his own, people averting their eyes, no-one wanted him to join them, maybe deep down they felt sorry for him and did not want to look at his naked and open loneliness. He was as invisible as the elderly, no-one saw him, heard him or even noticed him.

It was a bright day outside and putting on his warm coat, he went out for a walk, even the lure of another box set could not keep him in his empty flat. She needed some milk, the shop was around the corner, she didn’t really like to leave her house anymore but she couldn’t wait for the online shopping to deliver her milk, her one true pleasure in life, a nice cup of tea could not wait.

The man walked past the shop and looked in the door, he didn’t look where he was going and didn’t see her, BUMP…he knocked her to the ground and bent down to help her up.

“Are you okay?”, he asked….this was the first person he had spoken to in a long time.
“I’m fine thanks”, her voice sounded funny in her head.
He put out his hand and helped her up, he smiled and without thinking said “would you like to go for a coffee”, for the first time in a long time, neither were invisible.

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Ah, a nice take on the theme!

Many thanks, I'm sure that there will be lots of scifi related stories, but I kind of liked this take on the invisible people.

Hehe, is funny you say that but I don't see a lot of sci fi on steemit, considering the also I'd the platform I expected more!

I'd love to see more science fiction on steemit.
Perhaps I should create my own Sci-Fi channel at Discord,
under the roof of Fiction Workshop.
Love that lion face, meesterboom!

Thats a great idea. I love scifi!

Hehe, yeah, I like the lion face :O)

Actually, you are right, when I look around there isn't as much as I would have expected!

Wow what a heart touching story, I really felt sorry for them. The ending was great.
Good luck to you in the competition, with this story you will go very far I'm sure ✅

As always I appreciate the kind words , hope you are having a good day.

And thank you very much for the resteem

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@bex-dk @thinknzombie I am genuinely chuffed, there is so much excellent and (frankly) superior work out there, I am delighted just even to have been nominated. Many thanks for brightening up my day :-)

Wow this story is incredible. Thanks for sharing it as I feel so many people can relate to it!

Thank you for the really kind words :-)

Wow for a second there I almost thought it was me. Making me take another look at my priorities in life. Thank you for reaching me without even trying !!!

I'm glad you liked it and thank you for your kind words

Thank you for posting @scottish01

Lovely story....quite creative......invisible......brilliant. ^_^

Keep bleujay invisible please......

Wishing you and yours all the best. Cheers.

NB Appreciate the reSteem....very much.

Thank you so much for the kind words.

As for the resteem, your principles are always excellent, but the one today just really struck a chord with me, simple and true. Thank you for posting it.

Time is flying never to return. Hope you have a great day!

Thank you and have a great day also!

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Really excellent story and entry for the contest mate. Hope you're doing well buddy!

@tonyr thanks for the resteem and the kind words.

Doing well, hope you doing well?

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