I see black marks for eyes,
the mirror feeds lies
of humanity in this sleeve
of dead unyielding grief.
Wow this verse is splendid, very rhythmic and I love the internal rhymes therein as well, I love the repetition of schiamy in a few place too, it's like a reference and it makes it look quite enriching.
It's beautifully written my friend.
Thanks mate. I have been super busy past few days which is why I'm late to respond to your comment ;-)
I like to use repetition like that with themed/prompt poems sometimes. It has to be done carefully but can really add to the poetic structure, if done right.
Definitely my friend I did enjoy reading. you know it would be really great to see you participating more in @scuzzy's contests, hoping to see more from you
Glad you appreciated the reading Blockurator. I shall be sure to record one for your poem which is very nearly finished. I have been super busy past few days which is why I'm late to respond to this comment ;-)... but 'better late than never' they say.
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Hi @scuzzy. Thank you and also, I am honored to win 1st place :-) I am real glad that the poem gave you a strong 'shiver up the spine' feeling, after all that is what poetry is all about. Eliciting the emotional reaction. I am sorry this comment took so long for me to respond. I got caught like many, unable to comment with HF20 and then I kinda just ended up taking some time off from steemit. Back now though :-)
Wow this verse is splendid, very rhythmic and I love the internal rhymes therein as well, I love the repetition of schiamy in a few place too, it's like a reference and it makes it look quite enriching.
It's beautifully written my friend.
Thanks mate. I have been super busy past few days which is why I'm late to respond to your comment ;-)
I like to use repetition like that with themed/prompt poems sometimes. It has to be done carefully but can really add to the poetic structure, if done right.
I'm glad you enjoyed the poem :-)
Definitely my friend I did enjoy reading. you know it would be really great to see you participating more in @scuzzy's contests, hoping to see more from you
This is awesome. I love that word. Not only is this lyrically beautiful, and you read it well, but you taught me a new word. That's awesome.
Glad you appreciated the reading Blockurator. I shall be sure to record one for your poem which is very nearly finished. I have been super busy past few days which is why I'm late to respond to this comment ;-)... but 'better late than never' they say.
I'm glad you enjoyed the poem :-)
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Nice poem
Cheers wales :-)
I got chills listening to this. Thanks @raj808.
Hi @scuzzy. Thank you and also, I am honored to win 1st place :-) I am real glad that the poem gave you a strong 'shiver up the spine' feeling, after all that is what poetry is all about. Eliciting the emotional reaction. I am sorry this comment took so long for me to respond. I got caught like many, unable to comment with HF20 and then I kinda just ended up taking some time off from steemit. Back now though :-)