Rap session for iTALENT contest, feedback appeciated

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Working all day on this :) English is not my primary language and I have a strong eastern european accent so please do not hold a grudge. Lyrics are below. I hope you enjoyed listening to this track.

Please comment on what should I work on, and if you think I should keep uploading rap, it's going to get better.

I rap on Croatian and never really thought about rapping in English so this is my first. :)

This is for the contest held by @ivan.atman check out the contest

LYRICS:

All these years, my motto is, positivity and peace,
comfort for your ears, is my goal in this,
spreading love, send a kiss,
do you know what love is?
would you listen please?

love the perfect emotion,
no potion in the ocean for mutual devotion
love is little things, light breeze in your wings,
seeing favourite beings

we're only flesh, blood
rolling fresh bud,
flash flood, where's god?
did it start with big bang
or key to life is yin-yang

complementary forces,
serving best courses
is it good? of course is
endorse this, have no remorses
I love to fail cause it comes with a lesson,
learned to prevail, no more stressing

what is your story and whats in your mind?
are you seekin' glory, or makin' a dime?
I ain't makin' her mine, time invested in the hustle,
with rythm in a rain, enjoying the rustle,
why is the bus full? I guess this is my stop



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Lyricsi su ti odlični, trebao bi ih više ovdje objavljivati, imaju dobru vibru. 💚

Hvala ti, nema bas publike koliko vidim, pa bih se mogao vratiti na naski rep <3 Bit ce uskoro i cover kakav

Prijatelju lyrics su ti 💪
Za par godina kad ces negdje bit live zelim vip karte haha. Sad mi je pjesma usla u glavu i ne mogu spavat..

Za tebe ima mjesta i na bini <3

Thank you for participating in the iTalent Contest
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Don't forget you must vote from 5'th until 10'th of March if you want to be eligible, please check other contestants, if you don't vote for other artists/performers you get disqualified

PLEASE DO NOT VOTE BEFORE THE ANNOUNCEMENT
ON THE 5'th OF MARCH

good luck @positivity420

thanks, good luck to all the contestants :)

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iTALENT CONTEST "VOTING" HAS STARTED

All contestants must vote if they want to stay in the competition, contestants that don't vote until the 10'th of March are diqualified
How and where to vote you can find in the link below

https://steemit.com/art/@ivan.atman/italent-qualifications-or-voting-time-has-now-begun-or-all-contestants-vote-from-6-th-until-10-th-of-march

Good luck @positivity420

For any questions join the iTalent discord server

https://discord.gg/g4EZQ3d

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Meni je ovo odlično! 😉
Talenat.

Hvala ti :)
0 bodova talenat samo praksat mozak :)

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