Just read the whole lot in one go. It was what a story should be, a page turner that I couldn't put down.

The set-up was thrilling, and every step of the mission was exciting, particularly the first rendezvous with Henry Fango.

The world you created, in particular a class segregated London, and bubble-buildings mostly underground, with ancient brick ruins, was believable and atmospheric.

If there was a drawback to the story, it's one familiar to a lot of noir, which is that motivations become so murderous, that the identification and empathy I felt with Jason Pullman, in particular his feelings of inferiority vis a vis Angela Ladbury, faded as he and his clones became one-note murderers.

Fango being a murderer I get lol. But one of the things I love about "Blade Runner" for example, is how much Harrison Ford's character's heart bleeds for the androids, and how much Roy Batty himself, though ostensibly a villain, nonetheless has so much compassion for other androids. In that respect, the ending is so poignant in "Blade Runner," where we care almost equally for both protagonist and antagonist, despite the brutal noirish world they live in, whereas here, the lack of compassion in any character hurts you, I think.

Another missed opportunity is that Ladbury herself is ditched as a character, although she is made tantalizing at the beginning, and I wanted to hear more about her. By contrast, for such a short story, you gave Steve Nixon his due, and your descriptions of him were simultaneously humorous and sympathetic, which is a neat trick.

For the first 6 chapters, this was a gripping peerless story, but as a matter of taste, for the reasons given above, it started to lose my heart from Chapter 7, though it retained my head to the (very) bitter end.

Congrats on writing such an incredible story! With some tinkering, it could be a really effective movie script. Wow. :)