Your prowess as a short story writer is excellent, you were able to craft a believable world in very little time and I only saw about one technical mistake per entry which is excellent if you're not using a professional editor! The one for this one was the run-on sentence

He was contemplating getting another virtual golf program added to his Neural Net, he had used up his company insurance credits as far as leisure upgrades were concerned, but on his rather generous salary he could afford it, though he might have to keep it secret from Mrs Harper.

It needs a period between the first and second complete clauses.

You've earned a follow from me and I very much look forward to seeing more of your work in the future!

Cheers,

~ Mako